Shot 1:
This shot shows Tom carrying Summer into the kitchen in a honeymoon happy vibe. It shows their romance and sets the scene.
How to improve:
- I will shoot it from a long shot that way I will have the full scene and location in the same shot
- Tom will be holding Summer in a more romantic way
- Tom and Summer will be placed more to one side as he is carrying her into the kitchen
Shot 2:
Shot 2 is a scene that shows Tom cooking Summer a romantic dinner. This shot will be a mid shot which still enables both characters to be seen. Tom is standing up cooking for Summer which gives him more dominance and power.
How to improve:
- Tom will be more centered to show that it is focused on him being the one to cook dinner
- Summer will be set sitting at a table looking back gazing at Tom whilst he cooks.
Shot 3:
This shot shows Tom washing up and Summer glancing at him in romance. Again Tom has more dominance due to him being at a higher level than Summer and also he is more central to the shot.
How to improve:
- The shot will be taken from a slight side angle to enable the view of Tom washing up as currently you can just view his back
- This will be taken in a mid shot
Shot 4:
This shot represents Tom being the masculine man that he is and fixes the broken sink. Summer is by his side gazing at him once again. This is also a mid shot.
How to improve:
- Make the shot into a long shot so you can see Toms whole body
Shot 5:
This shot is a close up of Summer holding herself towards Tom both looking into each others eyes.
How to improve:
- Have Tom hold Summer back
- Have Tom and Summer look directly into each others eyes
Shot 6:
This shot shows Summer chasing Tom through IKEA. I have used a mid shot in order for both characters to be seen together.
How to improve:
- Have more people around them have it in a more busy environment
- Possibly shoot it in a long shot to show summer running
Shot 7:
This is the scene where Summer and Tom have just jumped onto the bed in IKEA and looking at one another.
How to improve:
- Take the shot from more of a birds eye point of view in order to capture their facial expressions
Shot 8:
This shot is the scene after Tom and Summer have been in bed.
How to improve:
- Again the shot will be taken from a more birds eye point of view to show their expressions and to have their faces as a more dominant feature
Shot 9:
This shot celebrates Toms success and the cigarette Tom is smoking also represents a phallic object.
How to improve:
- The shot will be taken more at eye level to Tom and Summer
There are clear links here to your study, however remember this is all from Tom's point of view - and delusion. You need to establish that this is him remembering the past from his own subjective position - therefore you must consider how the camera would be positioned to convey this. Also how will you establish this as flashback - this needs to be explored in the script and established.
ReplyDeleteGood poses and choice of actors, and you have commendably worked well with the limitations of photographing at school.
To improve:
Costume and location (Ikea) need work. Also the absence of props - tools and tool kit for the sink, water everywhere/blocked sink. The bed, the cigarette etc.
How can you change the exposure/lighting to convey that this is a dellusion/fantasy and not reality? Also how can you relate this to the colours schemes and design/style of props associated with 'strong masculinity' of the 1950s?
Consider what Summer will be wearing to demonstrate the 'femininity' change.
WT B3, Current grade C3